Here is what he said.
You asked for my critique it, here you go:
Shots, framing and screen direction
Excellent, good use of the 16x9 aspect ratio
nice, nothing exceptional. I understand you made this all by yourself for no money so in that case you are limited with what you can do lighting wise. You got a nice day or may have called it off on previous days, regardless, it worked.
Extremely well done, you did an excellent job of condensing time. I didn't feel rushed through the story which I do often in spots.
The woman's response seems off to me, she sounds like she is ADR'd and the sync doesn't match. Plus I'm not in love with her performance. I would have probably liked it better if she said, "Now that's cool" but this is a directors choice and I respect the choice you made.
Overall, I really liked it, especially considering that you were a one man band. Well done.
Not too shabby:) Thanks Steve.